Already a review...

I JUST wrote this new poem of mine, "Beat," posted it to some websites and have already received a review. The commentator said: "This is such a powerful write, I felt intensity with this. So nicely done."

Here is the poem:

Sheltered from this world,
Protected from potential harm,
Fearful of being released,
Wanting to maintain its innocence,

As it begins to mature,
Innocence slowly fades,
Longing for a sense of freedom,
To make its own decisions,

Finally out in the world,
Released to the masses,
Curiosity at its peak,
Expanding with every experience,

Handed to another,
Trusting of their care,
Full of life and joy,
Fears, worries and doubts spared,

No longer protected,
No longer innocent,
Beating with desire,
Beating with passion,

Looked at momentarily,
Before being thrown to the ground,
Slowly breaking,
Being kicked and stomped upon,

Released unto her,
Beating with life,
Broken and crushed,
The beating has stopped.